Like I said in the last post, in english class we are currently studying sonnets. Now this following poem isn't quite a sonnet, as some syllables don't fit the ten count rule, so it's 'sonnet based'.
I decided to start this with 'Shall I compare thee to a winters day' - A Shakespeare line, but as the subject is winter, i changed the summer to winter. Please suggest any improvements, as this is a first draft and could do with editing.
Shall I compare thee to a winters day?
Pure white surrounds, no sign of grey,
Is thee as graceful as a crystal snowflake?
Or such a stunning sight as a ice frosted lake?
Does she behold the shimmer of the snow?
Which causes awh with its enlightened glow,
As effortless as a bird swoops through the sky,
Or as gentle as snow drops appear to fly?
Can thee grant such joy and glee?
And let the inner innocense finally run free?
If she does possess qualities so fine,
I am truly blessed that I can call her mine.
Now that was wrote in a male-female point of view, so when I have chance to edit it, I may change the 'she' to 'he'.
Monday, 11 January 2010
Wednesday, 6 January 2010
Sonnet Based
So sorry for not updating, I have been really busy!
Now is a kind of sonnet I wrote, as in english classes at school we have been studying shakespeare's sonnets. It's not exactly a sonnet, as some of the syllables may not be exact, it's just based on sonnet guidelines.
Like snow in winter and flowers in spring,
I wonder if average is forgotten,
What if that spark I do not bring?
Does that make my life rotten?
I try to search for my very own gold,
But it appears I do not behold,
What can I do to be different?
Make a big scene just to be heard?
Does that involve me being persistent?
Or are others simply born preferred?
I try to be noticed, steal the show,
But I know however bright I shine,
No matter how much I try to glow,
The glorious sky will never be mine.
I do like that poem, the only part that I would change is the forgotten and rotten, as I think rotten isn't a good description to use, but I couldn't think of anything else, and I thought it sounds OK. If you have any idea's on what I could use, please comment!
Now is a kind of sonnet I wrote, as in english classes at school we have been studying shakespeare's sonnets. It's not exactly a sonnet, as some of the syllables may not be exact, it's just based on sonnet guidelines.
Like snow in winter and flowers in spring,
I wonder if average is forgotten,
What if that spark I do not bring?
Does that make my life rotten?
I try to search for my very own gold,
But it appears I do not behold,
What can I do to be different?
Make a big scene just to be heard?
Does that involve me being persistent?
Or are others simply born preferred?
I try to be noticed, steal the show,
But I know however bright I shine,
No matter how much I try to glow,
The glorious sky will never be mine.
I do like that poem, the only part that I would change is the forgotten and rotten, as I think rotten isn't a good description to use, but I couldn't think of anything else, and I thought it sounds OK. If you have any idea's on what I could use, please comment!
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